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Dot in the Sky ([personal profile] dotinthesky) wrote2003-09-26 02:43 pm

Le Photo Booth et L'Amour, by Commonpeople

Move with you, move against you. Sarah thinks.
Put your hands on me, put them on me. Adrien thinks.

The storm lies outside. They hide in the photo booth, like children from a fairy tale escaping the monsters that wish to capture them. The photo booth is tiny, with its round red seat that you can spin up or down, and white walls made of plastic. Someone has scrawled above the camera's dark window Avril was here. Sarah sits on Adrien's lap. They stare at the black windowpane, the camera's cover. At any moment a flashlight could flood their hideaway, capture Adrien's hands stroking Sarah's hair; bursts of light filling his face so she may see better where her lips must go. They are not in America, but they can hear Frank Sinatra played in the deserted shopping arcade.

I like his arms, I like his hair wet from the rain. Sarah thinks.
She didn't have to bring me here, she can kiss me whenever she wants. Adrien thinks.

They don't know how long the photo booth has been abandoned in the shopping arcade. They must have walked past it a million times, and always seen it empty. It's old, it shakes when Sarah tickles Adrien and he hits his back against the flimsy walls. A burst of light interrupts their embrace. They laugh, knowing the booth has come alive by itself, for them. Sarah sticks her tongue out. Adrien bites his, eyes shut to some imaginary pain. The flashbulb attacks. She can see the piercing through her tongue, reflected in the dark photo pane like a lighthouse in the rain.

Some boys take a girl and hide her from the rest of the world. Sarah thinks.
When the day is done, I just want to have fun. Adrien thinks.

He holds her face, leans towards her neck so he may rest. He holds her body tightly. The flashes are over. The machine begins to shake, creating the minutes just gone by. Liquid spurts in its machinery and covers the exposed paper. Hot air dries their pale faces, imprisoned forever in the camera's tiny eye. Sarah strokes his hair, kisses his left ear gently. Their bodies shake to some unlistenable hum. With the curtains closed, they pretend there is no world outside except the rain, the cold, the desolate arcade, and the scent of decay that rises from the shut down clothes stores. And Frank Sinatra, returning, louder than God, telling all young lovers to not forget New York.

He doesn't have my phone number. Sarah thinks.
Where will I take her when the rain stops? Adrien asks himself.

The rain's beat intensifies, drowns good ol' Frank. The roar of bursting drains reaches them, and the shouts of people trying to escape the rising flood that will take their cars; the surge of water that will bring havoc into the shopping arcade. Sarah and Adrien feel their toes grow wet: water laps against the photo booth's floor. They lift their legs and press them against the plastic walls - they can't help looking at each other and laughing.

I want the photo booth to float away. Sarah thinks.
I want the photo booth to float away. Adrien thinks.

Somebody pulls the curtains open and screams: "Get out! Go home!" A haggard man, dressed in a yellow uniform, fumes at them: the shopping arcade's janitor. Sarah notices a nametag on his uniform's breast jacket; Adrien reads it: "Guillaume Joubert - Senior Janitor". They slide off each other, slip away from the booth. Their steps form ever-expanding circles in the water-covered hallways. Their hands never quite touch as they run into the rain again.

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[identity profile] commonpeople.livejournal.com 2003-09-26 08:50 am (UTC)(link)
:oP

*bijou bijou*

[identity profile] icymorning.livejournal.com 2003-09-26 09:12 am (UTC)(link)
he is even sicker than this. i'm really, really scared of this guy now.

[identity profile] commonpeople.livejournal.com 2003-09-26 09:16 am (UTC)(link)
you are scared of the possibilities. tu a peur de l'amour!

[identity profile] icymorning.livejournal.com 2003-09-26 12:50 pm (UTC)(link)
je n'ai pas peur de l'amour, je vis avec. it's just that i don't have any feelings for adrien except friendship and it's sick to force love when there aren't any.

[identity profile] commonpeople.livejournal.com 2003-09-27 04:16 am (UTC)(link)
you know I'm teasing you, don't you? ;o)

*pulls Morgane's hair and runs away*

[identity profile] icymorning.livejournal.com 2003-09-27 09:49 am (UTC)(link)
*screams*
*stamps feet*
*calls for her mom*

[identity profile] lala-jones.livejournal.com 2003-09-26 12:08 pm (UTC)(link)
apart from whatever taboo the above thread is referring to, this is just a gorgeous piece of writing. precise, evocative images, rendered lyrically; brilliant layering of scene/po-mo commentary; pace just right, set off by internal monologue-couplet scheme - you, oliver, are a fucking genius. i can't believe you just knocked that off in an afternoon. fuck you.

[identity profile] lala-jones.livejournal.com 2003-09-26 12:12 pm (UTC)(link)
only crit (and you know there has to be one): i'm not sure how the phrase "good ole' Frank" is in line with the tone you've set for the narrator. otherwise, refer to above post.

[identity profile] commonpeople.livejournal.com 2003-09-27 04:14 am (UTC)(link)
i see that now... it does differ from the narrator's tone doesn't it? I'll do some editing on this piece on monday. ;o)

[identity profile] commonpeople.livejournal.com 2003-09-27 04:12 am (UTC)(link)
hahahah!! thanks Natalia... it wasn't just an afternoon but 7 hours of available time! I based it on this photo of Sarah and Adrien, who are good friends but sadly not in love (i.e. he is gay and she loves someone else... the janitor in the story - who I made a janitor because I don't like him!) That was the taboo... but I had a lot of fun with this. It came to me while I was taking a shower last morning - go figure...

:o)

[identity profile] lala-jones.livejournal.com 2003-09-26 12:09 pm (UTC)(link)
i am in awe of my friends, and grateful to know them.

[identity profile] commonpeople.livejournal.com 2003-09-27 04:13 am (UTC)(link)
ohhh... what a shunucky!!!